Independent Essay - 59

Let’s map out another reason prompt using G+3TiC=C and the six steps to
demonstrate OPDUL=C
in your essay.

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TASK: Check this essay for coherence using the Independent Essay
Proficiency Checklist on page 306, then rate it using the Independent
Essay Rating Guide on page 308. Compare your proficiency checklist
and your rating to those on page 337.

Note: There are mistakes in this essay. Can you identify them?

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Reason: Step-by-Step

Submit your essay. Step #6
Carefully read the prompt; formulate an opinion.
Step #1
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Let’s map out another reason prompt using G+3TiC=C and the six steps to
demonstrate OPDUL=C
in your essay.


identify them? Prompt How has technology made our lives better? Develop
your argument using examples and reasons.
G =

Ti = example sister
C

Ti = also typewriter
C

Ti = finally car
C

C = for the aforementioned reasons life is better
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Reason: Step-by-Step



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OPDUL=C
and has moved on to step #5.

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checklist and moved on to step #6.

TASK: Check the essay on the next page for coherence using the
Independent Essay Proficiency Checklist on page 310, then rate it
using the Independent Essay Rating Guide on page 312. Compare
your proficiency checklist and your rating to those on page 337.


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IV every day for six weeks. It made her really sick but without
chemo, my sister might not be here today. She had cancer ten
years ago and today she is happy with a good job and a big
family. As you can see, medical technology such as
chemotherapy has made my sister’s life better.

Another example is when I was in high school. When I was
learning how to type, we never had computers. We just had
old fashioned typewriters. They were really hard to use
because the keys were so heavy. Also, when I was typing, I
made lots of mistake, so I had to go back and start again. But
now with computers, typing is fast and easy. If I make a
mistake, I can back space or cut and delete. Using a computer
has definitely made my life better, especially now writing this
TOEFL essay.

Finally, I can say that the car has really made a big difference
in my life. Before I bought a car, I commuted by bus. I hated
it. It took up so much time. Also, when I went to work, I had
to get up early and sometimes the bus was late or never came.
What a hassle! In a nutshell, the bus was a nightmare. But
then I got a car, and suddenly the bus was history. Now I can
go anywhere, anytime. I can’t live without my car. Owning one
has really made my life better.

For the aforementioned reasons, you can see how technology
has made a positive impact on my life and other lives as well.

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Prompt What are the qualities of a good university? Develop
your position using illustrations and reasons. Prompt What are the qualities of a good university? Develop
your position using illustrations and reasons.
G = good qualities = Shelton University, it has good
teachers, courses + location