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forgets the dull routine of army by a romantic
adventure with the heroine:
Maybe she would pretend that was her boy that was killed and
we would go in the front door [of a small hotel] and the porter
would take off his cap and would stop at the concierge's desk and
ask for the key and she would stand by the elevator and then we
would get in the elevator and it would go up very slowly clicking
at all the floors and then our floor and the boy would open the
door and stand there and she would step out and would step out
and we would walk down the hall and would put the key in the
door and open it and go in and then take down the telephone and
ask them to send a bottle of capri bianca in a silver bucket full of
ice and you would hear the ice against the pail coming down the
corridor and the boy would knock and would say leave it outside
the door please.
Both and Hemingway use the sen-
tence to describe an experience taking place within the mind.
The style suggests the continuous flow of dreaming, for we
fantasize in a stream of loosely connected feelings and ideas
and images, not in neatly packaged sentences of intricately
related clauses and phrases tied together by if, but, yet,
therefore, consequently, on the other hand. Indeed, we some-
times fantasize not in words at all but in imagined percep-
tions, as Hemingway implies ("and you would hear the ice
against the pail"). Hemingway also goes further than Gra-
hame in imitating the mental state of fantasy: his one sentence
is much longer and its flow unimpeded by punctuation. This
technique is a variety of what is called "stream of conscious-
ness," a way of writing that suggests a mind feeling, dreaming,
thinking in a loose associational manner.

or perceptions may be repetitive, with little change and noth-
ing to flow together. Then parataxis is preferable to multiple
coordination. In the following example Virginia sum-
marizing a diary of an eighteenth-century Englishman visiting
France, uses a freight-train style to mock his insularity:
This is what he writes about, and, of course, about the habits of the
natives. The habits of the natives are disgusting; the women hawk
on the floor, the forks are dirty; the trees are poor; the Pont Neuf is
not a patch on London Bridge; the cows are skinny; morals are
licentious; polish is good; cabbages cost so much; bread is made
of coarse flour.
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Each detail is another instance of the same underlying insen-
sitivity. By hooking her clauses with semicolons (in one case
with a comma) Woolf stresses the dull, unyielding vision of
the diarist.
Along with its advantages, the freight-train sentence has
limitations. Like the segregating style, it does not handle ideas
very subtly. The freight-train sentence implies that the
thoughts it links together with grammatical equality are
equally significant. But usually ideas are not of the same order
of importance; some are major, others secondary. Moreover,
this type of construction cannot show very precise logical
relationships of cause and effect, condition, concession, and
so on. It joins ideas only with such general conjunctions as
and, but, or, nor or even less exactly with semicolons and
commas.
The Triadic Sentence
A second deficiency of the freight-train sentence is that it

Occasionally the shift may work in the opposite direction,
from long to short:
Calvin Coolidge believed that the least government was the best
government; he aspired to become the least President the country
ever had; he attained his desire. Irving stone
The Cumulative Sentence
Most commonly a cumulative sentence consists of an initial
independent clause followed by a number of subordinate con-
structions which accumulate details about the person, place,
event, or idea. Though the elements that come after the main
clause are technically subordinate, they carry the main load
of the sentence and are fully as important.
Cumulative sentences appear most often in description.
The writer begins with a general picture, like an artist's char-
coal sketch, then fills in the details:
A creek ran through the meadow, winding and turning, clear water
running between steep banks of black earth, with shallow places
where you build a dam.
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7000 Romaine St. looks itself like a faded movie exterior, a pastel
building with chipped arte moderne detailing, the windows now
either boarded up or paned with chicken-wire glass and, at the
entrance, among the dusty oleander, a rubber mat that reads
WELCOME. Joan Didion
Cumulative sentences are also useful in character sketches:
She [Anne Morrow Lindbergh] was then twenty-one, a year out of
Smith College, a dark, shy, quiet girl with a fine mind and a small
but pure and valuable gift for putting her thoughts and fancies,
about the earth, sky, and sea, on paper. John Lardner

it was a portrait not only of contrasts, but of a nation's lower
middle class coming out of its cocoon"). That sentence be-
comes a frame enclosing the details, a pattern nicely suited to
what the sentence is about.
Finally, there is another variety of the cumulative sentence,
in which the order is reversed: the accumulated details precede
the main clause instead of following it. In the following ex-
ample a novelist, discussing her art, begins by listing the es-
sentials of a story.
Conflicts and rivalries and their resolutions, pride and its fate, es-
trangement and reconciliation, revenge or forgiveness, quests and
searches rewarded or unrewarded; abidingness versus change, love
and its are among the constants, the themes of the
Story. Elizabeth
Notice how Bowen uses these to sum up all the preceding
nouns and to act as the subject of the sentence. (These, this,
that, those, and such are other pronouns which may be used
in this way.)
For Practice
Describe one of your typical days, first in five or six segregating
sentences, then in two freight-train sentences, and finally in one
long cumulative sentence. Keep to the same details and order in
each rendering.
The Parallel Style
Parallelism means that two or more words or constructions
stand in an identical grammatical relationship to the same
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