Independent Essay - 49

Advantage-disadvantage prompts, like compare-contrast prompts, ask you to argue
by comparing and contrasting the opposing sides
of a topic, for example: There are many advantages and disadvantages to owning a car. I could
write forever! What should I do?

Keep it simple. Change G+3TiC=C to G+2TiC=C. Develop one advantage in
body paragraph one and one disadvantage in body paragraph two.

When answering an advantage-disadvantage prompt, use G+2TiC=C and the six
steps to demonstrate OPDUL=C
in your essay.


Advantage-Disadvantage: Step-by-Step

Carefully read the prompt; formulate an opinion.
Step #1
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50 - Independent Essay
Note the transition of contrast connecting the body paragraphs.

G = there are advantages + disadvantages to own a car

Ti = for example I took the bus to work but the bus it
is very slow, always late for work = not good so I
bought a car
C = my car = not late for work = big advantage for me

Ti = in contrast a car uses gas, oil and insurance
I must make budget
C = having a car is expensive for me

C = to sum up a car has advantages + disadvantages
Personally, I think there is the advantages and disadvantages
to be own the car.

For example, I have a Honda care. Every time I drives to work.
Before I have to take the bus. The bus it take a long time.
Sometimes the bus misses me and I am late for work. Then I
saved my money and bought a Honda care. Now I am always
on time and my boss he no get angry no more for being so late
owning a Honda care is big advantage. Note: This test-taker has revised his essay according to his revision
checklist and moved on to step #6.

TASK: Check this essay for coherence using the Independent Essay
Proficiency Checklist on page 310, then rate it using the Independent
Essay Rating Guide on page 312. Compare your proficiency checklist
and your rating to those on page 334.

Note: There are mistakes in this essay. Can you identify them?

Check your first draft for Coherence using OPDUL=C.

Step #4
Revise your first draft using your revision checklist.

Step #5
Submit your essay. Step #6
52 - Independent Essay Advantage prompts ask you to argue the positive side of a topic. The positive side
states the advantages, for example:

When answering an advantage prompt, use G+3TiC=C and the six steps to
demonstrate OPDUL=C

Prompt What are the advantages of telecommuting? State
your argument using examples and reasons.
From my experience, I can definately say that their are many
advantages to working from your home.

For example, at work I have a small cubicle. It’s really noisy
because of people always talking and using the copi machines.
Also, people are always stopping and saying hello to me. This
is not good because it waists a lot of time. It also makes it
hard for me to finish my work. But at home, nobody bothers
me and I finish my work without interruption. This is a big
advantage of telecomuting.

Also, when I do go to work, I must get early and drive. It takes
an hour. Offen the traffic is bad. When there is an accident, I
get to work late. That means I have to stay late to finish my
assignments. Plus gas is expensive, especially since I have an
SUV. But if I work at home, I don’t have to worry about traffic
Note: This test-taker has revised her essay according to her revision
checklist and moved on to step #6.

TASK: Check this essay for coherence using the Independent Essay
Proficiency Checklist on page 310, then rate it using the Independent
Essay Rating Guide on page 312. Compare your proficiency checklist
and your rating to those on page 335.

happy. This is the best advantage of telecommuting, killing two
birds with one stone.

For those reasons, I believe there are advantages to working
from home.

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Check your first draft for Coherence using OPDUL=C.

Step #4
Revise your first draft using your revision checklist.

Step #5
Submit your essay. Step #6