, MOD E L' E S'S A Y S 267
Part of unconditional love is trust. My parents trust us to do what is right. They
know we would never do anything to harm them. They trust us so we trust them. We
know they won't hurt or mistreat us.
Because our parents love us, they also respect us. They treat us as individuals.
They accept our differences. They do not expect us to be like them. They want us to
make our own way in the world, not follow in their footsteps.
Without my parents' love, I would not feel confident. Without their trust, 'Iwould'
not feel free to do what I want. Without their respect, I would notfeel comfortable on my
own. All children should have such wonderful parents.
In my country we need to use land for building. Our country is develOPing and.
our industrial sector isgrowing. People are moving to the cities. We need to build more
factories, houses, and stores.
Our industrial sector has grown a lot over the past decade. We have built many
factories and we will continue to build more. The growth of industry has helped our
economy. There are more jobs now. If we build more factories, there will be even more
jobs.
Movies are popular because people are great watchers., We like to watch other pe9-
pIe's lives. By going to the movies we can bring excitement into our lives, express our
emotions, and imagine ourselves as someone else.
Our lives are not adventurous or glamorous like the movies. We don't fight the bad
guys all day and then go home to a luxury apartment. Wejust go to school, do our ,
homework, eat, talk to our friends, and sleep. We need a little excitement iniour lives
and we find excitement at the movies.
Humans are very emotional. We all like to cry and laugh. Sad movies give us a
chance to cry about our sadness. Funny ones give us a chance to laugh about our joy.
Sometimes it is easier to express our emotions in a dark movie theater.
Now I am a student, but I know some day I want to be a scientist or a politician or
a famous model. When I go to the movies, I can see my role models. I can see what they
wear and how they talk. I can imagine myself as they are, and maybe some day I will
really be like them.


Pets are important because theyprovide us with companionship and eveJ1with
love. It is not good, however, to have too close a relationship with a pet, or to treat it like
a human being. Devoting too much attention topets can prevent you from focusing on
other activities and on relationships with people. It can also be a waste of money.
Sometimes people who love their pets don't want to become involved in other activi-
ties. Jf you invite such afriend out for coffee, for example, thefriend mig~t say, "Idon't
have time. I have to walk the dog. !! Sometimes people don't want to take a weekend trip
because they don't want to leave their pets alone. Theyput their pets' interests before
.their own. Then they live lifefor their pets and notfor thelnselves.
Loving a pet too much can interfere with good relationships with people. Sometimes
people neglect their spouses and children in favor of their pets. A person who lives alone
might devote all his atteJ1tion to his pet. He might lose interest in making friends and
, being with people. A relationship with a pet is less complicated than a relationship with
a person. Sometimes it seems easier to choose pets overpeople.
People spend thousands of dollars on theirpets, but this money could have other
uses. It seeJns strange to buy special food for apet or take it to the doctor, when some
people don't have these things. Children all around the world grow up without enough
food, or never get medical care. It would be better to give a pet simple things and send·
the extra money to charity.
Pets give us a lot and they deserve our care and attention. It is never a good idea
to go to extremes, however. It is important to balance your pet's needs, with your oWn
MOD E L E S SAY S 269
can tell us a lot about the country where they were made.
have you learned about a country from watching its movies?
specific examples and details to support your response.
When I watch movies from other countries, I realize that people everywhere really
are similar. We may have different languages and cultures, but we all want to get an
education, need to make a living, and like to have fun.
Once I saw a movie made in China. It showed parents helping their children with

and go watch TV or call afriend. In a group, we decide a time and aplace to study,
and then we do it. We keep each otherfocused on the task.
It's more fun to study in a group than alone. Ifeel happy when I am with my
friends, even when we are working hard. After wefinish studying, we usually go out for
270 HOW TO PREPARE FOR THE TOEFL ESSAY
coffee or to the movies. This is something to lookforward to. It is always nice to spend
time with my friends.
I lookforward to being with my friends, so I lookforward to studying when I study
with them. The group helps me study better and learn more. Studying with a group is
the best way for me.
1851MAl You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business.
Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your
choice.
If I had enough money, I would purchase a business, not a house. A house is only
a place to live, but a business is much more. With a business, I could earn enough
money to buy a house and do other things as well. I could travel,for example, and I
could help my family, too.
1 have always wanted to buy a house, and a business would make this possible.
With a business I would earn enough money to buy a house. It might not happen right
away, but after a few years in the business, I am sure I would have enough money.
Then I would have both a business and a house.
After I buy my house, I could use my money to travel. I would like to visit other
countries. With a business, I could earn enough money to do this. I might also travelfor
business. I might have to go to other countries to attend conferences or meet clients. One
way or another, a business would give me the chance to travel.
One of my goals is to help my family. My parents don't own a house. With a busi-
nf!ss, I could help them buy one. I could also take care of them when they get older. I
would also like to be able to send them on a trip. If I had a good business, I could help
my parents in all these ways.
A house isjust one thing, but a business is so much more. A good business would

and explained.
5.1 travel
deal with other peo-
everything we need,
2. B
It asksfor your
5.2 have lots of newpie.
but natural
choice of two sides.
experiences
-1.2. We learn about
resources are not
3. A
It asks
Do you
5.3 read stories
teamwork, if the
endless.
agree or disagree?
5.4 stability of house-
game involves
4.2. Strip mining
4. B
It asksfor your
hold routine
being on a team.
destroys whole
opinion to be stated
1.3. We learn how to
regions, leaving bare

It asks
Which do
times we have to do
populations to the
you prefer?
Practice 6
what other people
point where they
8. A
It asks for a
5.1 to prepare for a
want.
can't recover.
choice to be made
career
2.1. Cooking takes a lot
5.1. The most important
and explained.
5.2 meet new
of time.
lessons can't be
9. A
It asks
Do you
people
2.2. Shopping for the
taught; they have to
agree or disagree?
5.3 of other subjects
food takes time.

It answers the
5.1
Scrabble
one can teach us
question
Do you
3.1. Watching movies
the judgement we
agree or disagree?
5.2 talk before the
and television can
need to decide on
3. Band C
They both
game
help us understand
how to deal with
mention reasons
5.3 teamwork
the world more
peer pressure.
why people visit
5.4 learn new words
3.2. For example, seeing
5.4. As we leave adoles-
museums.
from opponents
movies can expose
cence behind and
4. A and C

(or does not have)
more friends we
experiences
(or are not) easier
a useful purpose.
have the better.
Paragraph focus:
today.
2. Perhaps growing
Paragraph focus:
learn more about
2. It seems to me that
up in the country-
learn how to trust
yourself
most people prefer
side is (or is not)
others
Practice 9
(or do not prefer)
better than grow-
Paragraph focus:
1.1
big portions
to spend their
ing up in the city.
learn what to
leisure time out-
3. Certainly, our gen-
expect from others

Paragraph focus:
3.2 give additional
good that English
cult situation.
teaches cause-
information
is becoming the
Practice 6
effect relationship
3.3 show documentary
world language.
films
1. All things consid-
Paragraph focus:
Practice 3
ered, the family is
teaches us about
Practice 10
1. I believe that high
(or is not) the most
teamwork·
1. options
schools should (or
important influ-
Paragraph focus:
2. choiceshould not) allow
ence on young
teaches us to
s~udentsto study
adults.

learned about
Practice 11
do not enjoy
ambition
doing.
Practice 7
1. a number of
4. I suppose that I
1. In a way,it is better
Paragraph focus:
2. benefits
learned about love
would rather have
to make a wrong
4. Opinion: I'drather
3. introduce to
the university
decision than to
assign (or not
make no decision.be alone.
4. are apt
assign) me a room-
or
Paragraph focus:
5. impulsive
mate.
In a way, it is better
need time to pur-
6. relax
sue solitary activi-

1.1 first-It introduces
shopping center in
can (or cannot)
spirit
a sequence in
my neighborhood
.learn as much by
5. Opinion: Traveling
time.
will (or will not) be.
losing aswinning.
alone,is the only
1.2 next-It continues
a benefit to our way to travel. .
the sequence in~
community.
Paragraph focus:
time.
meet new people
1.3 we-It refers to
our and we

ANSWER KEY
273
previously men"
3.6 if-makes a cause
5. improve-matches
9. 5
tioned in the
and effect relation-

matches the
16. Cx
sentence.
children's help.
nouns teachers
1.6 as a result of-
4.3 later-explains
and doctors
Paragraph 4
The last sentence
when attitudes
9. where my cousins
17. 5
describes the
changed.
still live-matches
18. 5
result of allthe
4.4 hardly-explains
the phrase where
19. C
actions described
the degree that
my grandmother
20. Cx
in the rest of the
the children are
grew up
paragraph.
expected to work.10. to-matches the

contrasts this para-
1.2 C-follows the
2.1 C
2.3 whenever-means
graph with the
pattern If it's
every time.
preceding one.
selling it uses
2.2 A
2.4 such as-intro-
5.2 even though-
2.1 C-follows the3.1 A
duces a list of
makes a contrast
pattern They3.2 C
examples.
between the two
studied
2.5 consequently-
clauses of the
2.2 A-matches They
Practice 18
introduces the
sentence.
didn't have to learn
Paragraph 1
result of the situa-
5.3 as well as-adds
3.1 B-follows the

5.1
is active
degree.
situation of farm-
2.1 C
5.2 oppose active
3.2 while-tells when
ers with that of
3.1 Aand B
children use the
businessmen.
Paragraph 2
language.
Practice 16
6.1
cause active
3.3 on the other
Practice 13
7.1
build active
hand-contrasts
1. maintain-match-Paragraph 1
7.2 breathe active
the adults' situa-
es the base form
1. 5
7.3 will become active
tion with the chil-
learn
2. Cx

HOW TO PREPARE FOR THE TOEFL ESSAY
11.2 will be affected
4. D-ends with
Paragraph 4 These are, .
4. certainly ,
passive
questions
(Isn't it
the years when we
5. I believe.
Paragraph 3
important 1Don't
develop our moral sense
6. In my opinion
you want 1)
of what's right and
12.1 will say active
5. D-ends with
wrong.
7. I think
12.2 will be created
questions ( would
Conclusion The founda-
8. In my opinion
passive
11,Could you call
tion is laid, by and large,
9. overall
13.1 can have active
me ?)

study art and
music in high
19.1 is active
change.
1. Ithinkschool.
20. 1 is active
Paragraph 3The weather
2. to agree
2. Complete sentence
21.1 knows active
can change. '
3. No doubt
3 Iam assuf\1ingthat
22.1 brings active
Paragraph 4 Politics can
4. Perhaps
this is true of
22.2 will change active'
change.
5. Presumably
teenagers;
Conclusion The direction
23.1 will be active
of this change, in my
6. from my point of
4. All high school
Paragraph 5
opinion, cannot be
view
students must take

Practice 19
you make.
themselves.
1. A
4. I don't believe
Paragraph 2 Most
7. Students who have
2. C
5. No doubt
people assume that'
never drawn a
3. A
6. On the whole
famous people are rich
picture will be
7. As a rule
people, but that isn't
surprised when4. B
always true.
they start to,draw.
S. C
8. in my opinion
Paragraph 3 I also
8. It is always satisfy-
Practice 20
Practice 22
believe that being
ing to try some-
Topic Sentences
respected by coworkers

emotions and
3. C-explains what
about relationships.
everything.
fears.
could happen
(it ,
Paragraph 3 These are
Introduction focus:' fame,
12. The teacher who
would bring more
the years when we
respect, knowledge
taught me how to
variety , give us
begin our formal
play the piano was
the opportunity to
education.
Opinion words
very inspiring.
amuse ourselves ,
1. people believe
13. Complete sentence
bring more jobs )
2. I believe
3. definitely
ANSWER KEY
275
Practice 2

than watching a
to them is their
computer science
2. Once the buildings
movie.
own fault.
was relatively new.
were completed,
Novels and short
14. B.lt teaches them
4. Sentence OK.
the jobs would
.stories are exam-
that there are
5. They were learning
be those on the
pies of fiction.
other ways to view
how to be teach-
campus itself and
4. English,which is
situations.
ers.iournalists, and
would include
very idiomatic, is
teachers, office
the language of
Practice 8
economists I was
workers, custodi-

me a lucrative
3. Our community is
Young people aresuitable to the
career it helped in
a place where
looking for aarea.
my married life.
everyone knows
career.
6. B,beautiful
everyone else.
8. I married a Naval
Place can be
Practice 6
7. C,more attractive
officer throuqh the
replaced with the
Check EssayModel 21 for
8. A
years we've moved
subordina~ing con-
the correctpunctuation.
9. A
six times.
junction where.
9. Sentence OK.
Practice 7
10. B
10. Sentence OK.
4. Although playing

ideas.
4. C*,There are many
14. C,for
weather is hot.
5. Immigrant children
ways to make a
15. B,a lot
3. I'd like to have a
learn their new
difference in a
garden where I
language while
community.
Practice 9
could grow
playing with other
5. C,I believe that the
1. D
vegetables.
children and while
activity learning to
2. C
4. We have all we
going to school.
read brings hope
3. C
need, even though
And combines two
to the future.
we want more.

in all subjects.
10. B
276 HOW TO PREPARE FOR THE TOEFL ESSAY
6. C,You have to wait
5. Parallel structure;
4. Misplaced
culture and other
for somebody to
Paragraph 5, sen-
modifier;
cultures. What
return it or you
tence 3; Our par-
Paragraph 5,could have more
have to order it
ents teach us, oursentence 1; All
value than that?
from another
, teachers teach us,
sports teach
Grammar
library.
and our peersimportant skills.
2. Fragment;
7. BtThey will be able
teach us.
5. Parallel structure;
Paragraph 2, sen-
to do their work
Punctuation

11. C
them are valuable.
1, sentence 1.
walls in caves and
8. Capital letter;
7. Indent; Paragraph
made music with
12. A
Paragraph 3,
1, sentence 2.
drumst
13. C,too
sentence 2; If they
8. Indent; Paragraph
4. Parallel structure;
14. C, Look l;Ip.
love science
1, sentence 3.
Paragraph 3, sen-
Spelling
9. Indent; Paragraph
tence 1; Studying
Practice 10
art and music
Content
9. Spelling; Paragraph
1, sentence 4.
means more than
4, sentence 1; on
10. Indent; Paragraphdrawing a picture

listening to the
Grammar
sports have more
added benefit.
selections in
2. Sentence frag-
to offer in this area.
12. Capital letter;
a musical
ment; Paragraph 2,
2. Supporting
Paragraph 3t sen-
programt
sentence 2; For
details*; Paragraph
tence 4; In individ-
6. Cohesion;
example, they may
4t sentence 2-4:ual sports, on the
Paragraph 3, sen-
limit a child's free-
Team players have
other hand, there
tence 4;They learn
dom in the name
of safety.
to show up for
are no teammates
about what their
practices and

own.
Grammar
Content
societies.
4. Misplaced modifi-
3. Run-on; Paragraph
1. Conclusion*;
er; Paragraph 4t
3,sentence 2 + 3;
Paragraph 5t
sentence 4;
Players must learn
sentences .1-2;By
Sometimes par-
to communicate
studying art and
ents, especially
with other players
music in high
older ones, can't
to succeed. That is
school, students
keep up with rapid
not true for indi-
begin to under-
social or techno-
vidual sports
stand themselves
logical changes.
as well as their own

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